http://red-satin-doll.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] red-satin-doll.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] il_mio_capitano 2013-11-07 09:03 am (UTC)

Oh and I noticed this: She was pleased he’d given up that silly idea of leaving.....He still had some new tricks then.

And then his "you remember I'm leaving tomorrow?" And DAMN that works so well. Her internal monologue (she knew him so well, he understood her, etc etc) is usually the sort of prose that's to be taken at face value in lesser fics, but you've twisted that expectation entirely. Well done.

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